Wednesday, July 21, 2010

Could you please check if there are grammatical errors in these sentences?

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Dear Sir,





Thank you very much for sending us the scanned copy of the letter. Btw, in the letter it is stated that an annotated agenda was enclosed to the letter, but I can find none, only the questionnaire.


Could you please send us the aforementioned agenda?





And if it is possible, could you please send me the softcopy template of the questionnaire? Thanks

Could you please check if there are grammatical errors in these sentences?
A lil





This is better:





Dear Sir,





Thank you very much for sending us the scanned copy of the letter. By the way, in the letter it is stated that an annotated agenda was enclosed to the letter. It seems that I can not find it. I only see the questionnaire.


Could you please send us the aforementioned agenda?





And if it is possible, may you please send me the soft copy template of the questionnaire?


Thanks





You also have some spelling mistakes that you need to look into that I've fixed.
Reply:If this is supposed to be a business letter, it not only has bad grammar, but is structured too informally.





Try this more formal structure and wording:





Dear Sir:





We have received the scanned copy of the letter. Thank you for sending it so promptly.





Unfortunately, the annotated agenda referenced in that letter was not included. Instead, we received a questionnaire.





Please forward the referenced agenda to us, along with the softcopy template of the questionnaire.





Thank you for your time.





Sincerely,
Reply:Dear Sir,





Thank You very much for sending us the scanned copy of the letter. The letter stated that an annotated agenda was enclosed but I can only find the questionnaire.





Could you please send us the aforementioned agenda and, if possible, a softcopy template of the questionnaire?





Thanks.
Reply:perfect
Reply:Dear Sir,





Thank you very much for sending us the scanned copy of the letter. By the way, in the letter it is stated that annotated agenda was enclosed to the letter, but i COULDN'T FIND ONE. I ONLY FOUND the questionnaire.


Could you please send us the aforementioned agenda?





And if it's possible, could you please send me the softcopy template of the qustionnaire? Thanks.
Reply:It doesn't really sound right. I'd say this:





Dear Sir,





Thank you very much for sending us the scanned copy of the letter. However, in the letter it says that there is an annotated annotated agenda attached, but I only see the questionarre. Could you please send that agenda?





Also, if possible, could you please send me the soft copy template of the questionnaire?





Thank you,


(sign your name here)
Reply:Be more formal.





Use a colon instead of comma after "Sir"; substitute


"Incidentally," for "Btw,"; insert a blank line after


"questionnaire."; substitute Thank you." for "Thanks";


add a closing (like "Sincerely,").


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